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This a really interesting concept. It's something that you could run with and what's cool about it is that this could actually happen right under our noses and we wouldn't ...

Wow. I'm really blown away by this. It's wonderfully descriptive and very stirring. I'm a little confused about what you keep referring to as Jeremaid's Disease, but I could just ...

You can find part one in other fiction. I would just like to point out, up front, that there are no vampires in this story. "Who are you?" It was ...

I can tell it's really beautiful, but I can't say that I got it. I feel like you need to make your meaning more clear. There are a lot of ...

Great job again! You have a really good descriptive flair. Comparing the lake to silk is one example. You might want to, in places, substitute commas for periods and vice ...

I like the idea. You write really well and since it's in first person, it's like a continuous stream of thoughts. A few things that I noticed were that you ...

He was always so peaceful when he slept; this man whose name Mary didn't know. The only information about him that she could glean from his sparsely decorated apartment was ...

I didn't actually get through the entire thing, but here are some of the things I notice from what I did read. You might want to separate your sentences more ...

First off. Great writing. You've got a really distinctive style that I love. It's really descriptive in a way that's not obnoxious. I'll admit that I was a little confused ...